Hannah's Tears
why, God?
can't you see the
tears flowing
like the Jordan
from these eyes
that You created?
why?
God,
why has this shame
been cast upon me?
i look around
and see them
beautiful, smiling,
everywhere
but in my arms.
so let this prayer
fall like pure
soundless snow
from my lips
Lord,
you know how much
i love Your ways,
keep and follow
every command.
let me love a child
for a little while
let me suckle
a son to my breast
and i will give him
back to You.
look down
upon Your servant
look down
and remember her.
1 Samuel 1
original version of "United in Sorrow" found in Final Portfolio
2014
A nice poem with sincere sentiments. Glad you have Jesus in your life.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Love love, Andrew. Bye.
This does a good job of capturing a plea, a prayer from someone with a deep faith. I think the image she sees of the other women with babies could be a touch stronger/more evocative. It might also have more emotion if you allowed for longer lines . . .
ReplyDeleteUpon reading this, I thought you might like the poems of Christina Rosetti . . .